Wednesday, December 1, 2010

Magpie Tales Photo Prompt 43


two steps 


virgin snow 
dares footprints.

I want to peer 
inside your 
windowed door,

to leave my mark
two steps at a time.



Poem © 2010 by R. Burnett Baker 
Photo courtesy of Willow @ "Magpie Tales" 

26 comments:

  1. Beautifully sensual. I love the notion of virgin snow, daring footsteps. This just might be my favorite of yours, Rick.

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  2. I like the "To leave my mark two steps at a time". Left me with a sense of serious intent... Thank you Rick.

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  3. Beautiful poem. It leaves me with a sense of absence: leaving one's mark is done for others to remember us after we're gone.

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  4. lovely poem- leaving ones mark.

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  5. A good idea, very concisely expressed.

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  6. Beautifully 'spare' yet saying so much.

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  7. To leave a mark, yes! Haunting piece.

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  8. ...and in my hope the prints don't fade away in the thaw.

    Brilliant prose.

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  9. two steps at a time...like that...just dont trip in your haste...smiles.

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  10. Virgin snow just begs to be walked in. Nice Magpie.

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  11. nice rick. rich inside the economy of the writing. steven

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  12. I read a ton of sensuality into
    this poem, sir. If we hadn't seen
    Tess' photo prompt, we could
    see the double meaning of
    each line--Virgin snow of course
    begs to be violated, or marked,
    and the /windowed door/ could
    be the door we all find ourselves
    knocking on, peering into, begging
    entrance; and your /two steps at
    a time/ just testament to your
    passion, your verve. Or not;
    really enjoyed the sparse jaunt
    of your few words.

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  13. You make a strong case for opening that door ...

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  14. Goodness! I so appreciate each and every comment. When I first saw the photo this morning it had begun to snow here in Rochester. I actually did try to see beyond the glass of that door and I imagined how it looked cold and dark inside. That reminded me of the longing for connection and intimacy.

    Again, thank you all!

    Rick

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  15. WOW. This was so simple, but so wonderful. I just really, really loved this.

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  16. Even two steps will spoil the virgin snow and then there is no going back.

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  17. It always pays to take 2 steps at a time!!

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  18. I have never seen snow & I would love to leave my mark in that fresh blanket of snow!! Very nice!

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  19. Dear Rick: Simply brilliant! I love the Texas two-step, especially on my heart...feel free to dig in the cowboy boots!

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  20. This poem is lovely. I'm just curious. I've seen this picture in about five different blog. is this like a series or something?

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  21. Rick this is breathtaking....so much said in few words...i love it!! :-)

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