tickling bathwater
feet in a river;
a face in an opened window;
toes tickling bathwater.
all elements of risk,
measurements of confidence
before diving
into
life.
Poem © 2010 by R. Burnett Baker
Photo courtesy of Willow at Magpie Tales
6 hours ago
Great idea masterfully developed as usual!
ReplyDeleteThe building of the central idea is subtle, and the metaphor is breathtaking. "Diving into life"...wonderful.
ReplyDelete"...all elements of risk,
ReplyDeletemeasurements of confidence"
Your simple, elegant pieces always have a meaty bit to chew on. I particularly love this one.
what enlightening tale,
ReplyDeletemasterfully said!
Oh how true .... nicely written!
ReplyDeleteLove the way this moves, almost sways in then out, but still manages to dive directly into that final word. Beautitully written and expressed.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
ah yes- diving into life- and each person's level of confidence. Very thoughtful.
ReplyDeleteyep, you must get in the water of life
ReplyDeletewell well done
and beautiful as always
the measures of one's confidence - excellent piece!
ReplyDeleteah yes.. life like a bath.. liked the comparisons and depth to this..
ReplyDeleteLeo
wow - had to read it a few times - you combine different things that you think would exclude each other to something worth thinking about
ReplyDeletemy magpie is here
and some risks are worth it...had to read it a few times but it was well worth it...smiles. nice mag!
ReplyDeletemy magpie
Very nice -- even to the shape of the words on the page!
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