two steps
virgin snow
dares footprints.
I want to peer
inside your
windowed door,
to leave my mark
two steps at a time.
Poem © 2010 by R. Burnett Baker
Photo courtesy of Willow @ "Magpie Tales"
9 hours ago
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Beautifully sensual. I love the notion of virgin snow, daring footsteps. This just might be my favorite of yours, Rick.
ReplyDeleteI like the "To leave my mark two steps at a time". Left me with a sense of serious intent... Thank you Rick.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem. It leaves me with a sense of absence: leaving one's mark is done for others to remember us after we're gone.
ReplyDeletelovely poem- leaving ones mark.
ReplyDeleteA good idea, very concisely expressed.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully 'spare' yet saying so much.
ReplyDeleteTo leave a mark, yes! Haunting piece.
ReplyDelete...and in my hope the prints don't fade away in the thaw.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant prose.
two steps at a time...like that...just dont trip in your haste...smiles.
ReplyDeleteVirgin snow just begs to be walked in. Nice Magpie.
ReplyDeleteoh my my my
ReplyDeletenice rick. rich inside the economy of the writing. steven
ReplyDeleteI read a ton of sensuality into
ReplyDeletethis poem, sir. If we hadn't seen
Tess' photo prompt, we could
see the double meaning of
each line--Virgin snow of course
begs to be violated, or marked,
and the /windowed door/ could
be the door we all find ourselves
knocking on, peering into, begging
entrance; and your /two steps at
a time/ just testament to your
passion, your verve. Or not;
really enjoyed the sparse jaunt
of your few words.
You make a strong case for opening that door ...
ReplyDeleteGoodness! I so appreciate each and every comment. When I first saw the photo this morning it had begun to snow here in Rochester. I actually did try to see beyond the glass of that door and I imagined how it looked cold and dark inside. That reminded me of the longing for connection and intimacy.
ReplyDeleteAgain, thank you all!
Rick
WOW. This was so simple, but so wonderful. I just really, really loved this.
ReplyDeleteEven two steps will spoil the virgin snow and then there is no going back.
ReplyDeleteQuietly erotic - nice!
ReplyDeleteIt always pays to take 2 steps at a time!!
ReplyDeletelove this! both feet in :)
ReplyDeleteI have never seen snow & I would love to leave my mark in that fresh blanket of snow!! Very nice!
ReplyDeletePoignant passion.
ReplyDeleteDear Rick: Simply brilliant! I love the Texas two-step, especially on my heart...feel free to dig in the cowboy boots!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is lovely. I'm just curious. I've seen this picture in about five different blog. is this like a series or something?
ReplyDeleteRick this is breathtaking....so much said in few words...i love it!! :-)
ReplyDeleteI really like this.
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