Thursday, January 13, 2011

Magpie Tales Photo Prompt 48: A Cobwebbed Melody


your lyric


each note faded 
then scaled from
the page of our 
cobwebbed melody.

I tore myself 
from your lyric 
and you fell away
singing. 

Poem © 2011 by R. Burnett Baker 
Photo courtesy of Tess Kincaid at Magpie Tales. 

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16 comments:

  1. AndreasJanuary 13, 2011 at 6:55 AM

    cobwebbed melodies are always the best.

    i love this.

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  2. Cheryl CatoJanuary 13, 2011 at 7:40 AM

    "Cobwebbed" what an excellent word. Entangled, obscured, confused... that can be the way of a relationship. Your poem is sweet & to-the-point.

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  3. SuzJanuary 13, 2011 at 8:15 AM

    oh my Rick, this was awesome
    hit the mark
    and yes, "cobwebbed"..excellent choice of word

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  4. HelenJanuary 13, 2011 at 8:18 AM

    It is so neat you could see cobwebs in the photo ... I did and wondered if I would be the only one. Nice write!

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  5. Tess KincaidJanuary 13, 2011 at 9:23 AM

    Beautiful and incredibly sad, as well.

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  6. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJanuary 13, 2011 at 10:32 AM

    lovely words...
    your words sweet like doughnuts.

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  7. stevenJanuary 13, 2011 at 1:30 PM

    i love "fell away singing". oh yes! steven

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  8. Glenn ButtkusJanuary 13, 2011 at 3:03 PM

    Sad, lyrical, yet with a ray
    of hope, or song on its
    tail. Terrific poem, Rick.
    I missed the cobweb icon
    on the original prompt,
    keying in on love, on
    matrimony ad infintum;'
    but your broken relationship
    conjured for me some image
    of an odd couple, of misfits,
    of sheared gears and
    misaligned cogs.

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  9. Vicki LaneJanuary 13, 2011 at 3:20 PM

    Those last four line are absolutely wonderful!

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  10. MargaretJanuary 13, 2011 at 3:35 PM

    powerful

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  11. Doctor FTSEJanuary 14, 2011 at 2:47 AM

    Yes, cobwebbed is the poem's powerful image.

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  12. JinksyJanuary 14, 2011 at 2:20 PM

    A fragile melody hangs on every cobweb...

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  13. Lucy WestenraJanuary 15, 2011 at 6:34 AM

    Surely the "cobweb" is only one detail of the poem's extended metaphor, which is very effective.

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  14. Jim SwindleJanuary 15, 2011 at 6:25 PM

    I don't understand all of this brief poem, but it's very well-written. It evokes interesting meanings.

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  15. OliviaJanuary 16, 2011 at 10:49 PM

    A very nice read indeed.. Thank you for sharing this.. :)

    I invite you to join our 18th potluck beginning this Sunday, Hope to see you at Http://www.jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/
    Week 18 Theme: Languages, Signs and Symbol. Poets , especially First Time Participants are also welcome to share old poems or poems unrelated to our theme..
    Let me know if you have questions…hope to see you in… Your participation delights us, keep writing, and keep sharpening your talent … xoxox

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  16. AnonymousJanuary 18, 2011 at 9:23 AM

    welcome sharing your poems with our poetry potluck today..

    you can link in 1 to 3 old poems or poems unrelated to our theme as first time participant, have fun.

    you got talent, keep it up.

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