Breakfast, 1921, Fernand Leger
Shared by Tess Kincaid
phantasm
let me stand in rain
without cover, feel warmth
in its chill. give me laughter
for free, I'll pay for your
tears. reach for my hand,
touching fingertip to palm,
drawing nearer to one
common breath. your voice
is fetish, imagination heard
in cadence and measure, and
you, this ether-world vision,
alive and unreal.
Poem © 2012 R. Burnett Baker
You've captured the divine madness with elegance Rick.
ReplyDeletelike a lot of things about this, ethereal, indeed!
ReplyDeleteThis line amazes me:
ReplyDeletegive me laughter for free, I'll pay for your tears.
your voice is fetish....ha love that...and the line laurie points out...cool turns of phrase man....
ReplyDeleteVery expressive and sensitive, Rick. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeletelove the line:
ReplyDeletethis ether-world vision
It's true we live part time in an ether world community!
". . . reach for my hand,
ReplyDeletetouching fingertip to palm,
drawing nearer to one
common breath"
Lovely! With this intent it is no wonder that the chill of the rain can warm!
I love the rain in my face...beautiful, elegant write, Rick...
ReplyDeleteAy Papi :)
ReplyDelete"your voice
ReplyDeleteis fetish"
That is just divine.
I, too. was captured by the 'voice is fetish' phrase. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteLovely, you pulled a lot from prompt and I love the passion of it.
ReplyDeleteThis is gorgeous, and ethereal.
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whimsygizmo.wordpress.com
"Your voice is fetish"..more than beautiful! Overwhelming emotion in this..
ReplyDeletesuch passionate writing
ReplyDeleteThis is so what I first felt in looking at this photo prompt, in the beginning! This is perfect!
ReplyDeleteSo.. real! :)
ReplyDeletei'd say this is a keeper relationship, heavy rains or not. :^)
ReplyDelete'give me laughter for free, I'll pay for your tears.'
no doubt, it's a great line, rick.
nice to meet you here.
kj
In all it's turns and ways of phrase it is brilliant
ReplyDeleteExcellent write!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
give me laughter
ReplyDeletefor free, I'll pay for your
tears.
Lovely. This almost brought the tears!
Absolutely gorgeous!!!!
ReplyDeletethis is fantastic......
ReplyDeleteas always, a good write sir!
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
Feel warmth in its chill
ReplyDeleteNice. Perhaps we should put the umbrella down more often.